Friday Fictioneers 05-03-2013: It Will Remain

The Friday Fictioneers is a group writing 100 word short fiction based upon a picture prompt. Each week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields presents a picture. All are challenged to write a story from it. The 100 word limit isn’t strict but everyone is encouraged to stick to it as much as possible. Anyone may join in. The works of clever people are already available to view here. This week, Kent Bonham presents a picture of a gorgeous building. My story begins after the picture.

Genre: Suspense
Word Count: 101

Source: Ken Bonham

Cloutier tossed the picture down. “A relic,” he sneered. “In a strategic location for a modern mall. It’s in the way and will be removed.”

“You’re the fifth owner in two years. The others planned the same, and they died strangely,” countered Lougherty. “Please reconsider.”


Lougherty caught a reflection in the silverware. That glint between the clouds wasn’t the sun.

“Have you heard about the satellite that’s out of control and re-entering?” He asked.


“Good luck to you, Sir.” Lougherty stood up and left.

As he drove away, he didn’t look twice at the sudden flash of light behind him.

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
This entry was posted in Europe, Short Fiction and tagged , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

42 Responses to Friday Fictioneers 05-03-2013: It Will Remain

  1. Jan Brown says:

    He should have listened! Actually, he shouldn’t have had the outrageously stupid idea in the first place….


  2. Linda Vernon says:

    Oh wowee! Good good story! I love that he caught glint behind the clouds in the reflection of the silverware — original and cool! 😀


  3. susielindau says:

    Love the finish and his calm exit.


    • EagleAye says:

      Oh yes. Well said! He could have avoided that. “You can lead a horse to water, but you can’t make him drink it.”

      Thanks for the fun comments as always.



  4. Can’t say he wasn’t warned.! Meanwhile, the building lives on….. beat….beat….beat….. 😉


  5. Sandra says:

    That would have been warning enough for me. Great idea!


  6. zookyworld says:

    I like how the satellite is modern and the developer is striving for something modern over the “relic.” Nice balance for the justice that befalls him…


    • EagleAye says:

      Yeah, there’s a certain irony there. “I got your ‘modern’ right here.” The forces the defend the house are eminently practical, and will use whatever resources are available, modern or ancient.


  7. troy P. says:

    Assassin satellites – loved it!


  8. julespaige says:

    A bit behind on my comments…just catching up from last week…
    I wrote a story a few years back about inanimate objects helping to ‘eliminate’ a rather nasty ‘Uncle’. It would be interesting to see this story with a buyer that was accepted.

    I did show your ‘camera bug’ story to my hubby. He made a very appropriate groan and grimace.
    I’m guessing that’s a very good compliment from an engineer 🙂


  9. elappleby says:

    Yikes – maybe he should have listened! A perfectly formed little tale. I really enjoyed this 🙂


  10. Great, the building is a landmark… !!! the world have enough malls.


  11. rgayer55 says:

    Good one, Eagle. I thought the painted the antagonist extremely well.


  12. I always love a good “I told you so” revenge story. So much the better with ancient powers and a satellite turned projectile. That’s a lot of exciting things in 100 short words!


  13. If you can engineer this for some other property developers, I will send you a list. Great story.


  14. I like it and you had a unique idea.



  15. Anyone who plans to destroy this beauty deserves to die!! 😉


  16. Dear E.A.
    Some people just won’t listen to reason, will they? Good one.


  17. neenslewy says:

    Fantastic, a complete story in a flash. Masterfully done!

    PS also love the blog theme/ background!


  18. Great foreshadowing and buildup. You really pulled me in and took it right to the end.


  19. kz says:

    BOOM! lol loved it. he had it coming. shame on him.:)


Don't be shy. Say something!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s