On Time – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

Written for Alastair’s Photo Fiction. Story begins after the photo.

Genre: Humor
Word Count: 150

Copyright: Alastair Forbes

On Time

Sarah glared at him on the platform. “Why Vince? Why stay?”

“Because we’re good for each other. You’ve admitted as much.” He whined.

Sarah pointed at the status board that read one minute until the next train arrived. “You have that long to convince me to stay with you. If I get on that train this is our last Sunday, our last day period!” She crossed her arms and waited.

On his heels, Vince thought fast. “We like the same things. We’re always laughing together.”

“All true, but not what need to hear.”

“The sex is great?”

“Again, true. But I need more.”


“This train is always on time,” she warned.

Vince eyed the status board, wide eyed. “I’d be lost, without you. I…love you.”

Sarah smiled. “At last, you’re on time,”  and she kissed him deeply.

Some day, she planned to tell him the train didn’t run on Sundays.

Each week, Alastair Forbes presents an original photo and encourages creative minds to write up to 150 words based upon the photo. Anyone can join in, so why not? There’s plenty of great writers out there already writing for this weekly challenge, so join us in writing and reading some great flash fiction. Original prompt is here: http://alastairsphotofiction.wordpress.com/2013/07/21/photo-fiction-sunday-july-21st-2013/

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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19 Responses to On Time – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

  1. Alastair says:

    Oh I did laugh out loud with that last line 🙂


  2. Gabriella says:

    That’s a good and funny variation on the photo!


  3. Lewis Cave says:

    I really like your take! I wander how he will take the news?


  4. paulmclem says:

    What an old softy 🙂


  5. JulieMc says:



  6. Lyn says:

    Sneaky….I like that 🙂


  7. nightlake says:

    Why doesn’t he say it at first though..is it so difficult to admit feelings. a very nicely written story


    • EagleAye says:

      For some guys it’s a real challenge. Others not. This guy had to have his feelings pulled out kicking and screaming. And thanks,. I’m glad you enjoyed it.


  8. He got there in the end! Well done!


  9. zookyworld says:

    That last line killed! I liked the dialogue before this, felt like something a couple may talk about, and you wrapped it up perfectly.


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