Hunting – Friday Fictioneers 09Aug13

Written for the Friday Fictioneers. Story begins after the image.

Genre: Humor
Word Count: 100

Copyright -Renee Heath

Hunting

“Morning Mr. Johnson!…Morning Mrs. Kingler!” Emily said cheerily. She wore her short, swishy baton twirling skirt and tossed her batons as she always did. The people of tiny Parkville smiled awkwardly at the odd but effervescent 14-year old.

Jack, new to the town from Chicago, saw an opportunity to practice his fetish.

When she entered an alley, Jack was waiting. “Hey sweetie, want some can…”

He never expected a baton flying at his face.

Emily stepped over the unconscious Jack and relieved him of $278.64.

She cut a 17th notch on her baton and effused, “I love hunting in the morning!”
__________________

The Friday Fictioneers writes up to 100 words each week from a photo prompt provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Anyone may join this group of creative minds and write as well. This week’s prompt may be found here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/08/07/9-august-2013/

Advertisements

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
This entry was posted in Short Fiction and tagged , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

58 Responses to Hunting – Friday Fictioneers 09Aug13

  1. julie mc says:

    Who needs napalm in the morning when you’ve got a baton?

    Like

  2. LOLOL….I never thought of that in my baton twirling days! Oh my!! Great writing…thanks for the giggle.

    Like

  3. Dear EagleAye,

    I loved this for a number of reasons but it was the exact dollar amount of $278.64 that Emily took from Jack that really sealed the deal and made your outlandish story come to life. Good job.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    Like

  4. lewis cave says:

    Great take, I hope she continues to find success!

    Like

  5. summerstommy2 says:

    Don’t you love a woman in control. That and an idiot and you have a great tale. Well done.

    Like

  6. Jan Brown says:

    Loved this! Several twists in the space of 100 words…the new guy…the self-defense diva…and the very bad girl! Nicely done.

    Like

  7. kz says:

    haha that’s one awesome girl πŸ™‚ never knew a baton could be so handy. awesome story πŸ™‚

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      She is. Predators beware! If anyone’s ever been accidentally hit by a baton, they’d know a baton could be a fierce weapon. Thanks much for the visit and your thoughts. πŸ™‚

      Like

  8. misskzebra says:

    Well, the things I produced at cooking club were probably just as dangerous as batons…

    Like

  9. Sounds to me like a new weapon for the police to use when hunting predators. Can’t you just see them recruiting baton twirlers? πŸ™‚ More fun than being on line pretending to be a child.

    janet

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      Very cool. They could create a division of baton twirlers and call them the “pink, and black and blue” division. Definite fun for the girls when they whack a predator in the head. I’d pay to see that.

      Like

  10. Joe Owens says:

    Pay no attention to that short skirt, keep your eye on the baton, you pervert!

    Like

  11. vbholmes says:

    This kid’s going places–no wasting time competing in baton-twirling beauty contests, she goes straight for the cash-in-hand gigs.

    Like

  12. Dear E. A.

    Now where did I lay my baton? I’m glad I wasn’t drinking anything when I read the ending line. As it was I snorted. Quick thinking young lady. She’ll go far, if she doesn’t end up in reform school first. Well done, sir. Well done, indeed!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      Thank you kindly Rochelle! Perhaps it’s best to stay away from coffee when reading the last line? Emily is probably too clever to end up in reform school. Though she might end up owning one. Your kind words do me good! πŸ™‚

      Like

  13. helenmidgley says:

    Gotta love a girl with a baton, great read πŸ™‚

    Like

  14. neenslewy says:

    A great ending!

    Like

  15. pattisj says:

    This has been the highlight of my day! She’s saving up for college. Or a new cell phone.

    Like

  16. LucyJartz says:

    Glad you didn’t wait until Friday to post, this was a pretty good story.

    Like

  17. Lyn says:

    Oh, I can see Emily (my granddaughter’s name by the way) protecting the storekeepers too, if anyone decided to try and play the heavy and demand protection money. Yep, they’re just the sort of people who would follow a sweet young thing into an alley. Give Emi 10% of the recovered money and her college fund is ensured πŸ™‚
    You never disappoint Mr. Momus.

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      Oh yeah. Emily is basically a sweet girl. She just doesn’t see anything wrong with robbing a predator. If she could protect someone else from the evil-minded, she would definitely do it. Glad you enjoyed the story. πŸ™‚

      Like

  18. I like the twist on the expected ending. Good for her!

    Like

  19. wow I love everything about this story! This girl is amazing!

    Like

  20. Haha! Just desserts, or… Great job!

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      The guy has even worse coming, but Emily is actually a real softie one you get to know her. She just has a bit of a thing against creeps. Thanks for stopping in!

      Like

  21. NOW I know why it’s called a baton. Loved the notch cutting.

    Like

  22. zookyworld says:

    What a turnabout! Don’t mess with Emily and that baton. This looks like a lucrative practice for her, with all those notches!

    Like

    • EagleAye says:

      Turnabout is fair play, eh? Yeah, Emily is pretty dangerous with it. And it really seems like a money making venture. Thanks much for your thoughts! πŸ™‚

      Like

  23. Haha! That was a terrific story!

    Like

  24. What an adorable 14 year old!

    Like

  25. bennitheblog says:

    Unexpected and fun! Great piece.

    Like

  26. annisik51 says:

    Interesting tale, well-written. You are very specific about the amount of money your heroine took from Mr Sleazeball from Chicago. Is this significant? Just curious. Ann

    Like

Don't be shy. Say something!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s