Mercury In Retrograde – Friday Fictioneers

Written for the Friday Fictioneers. A story about beliefs begins after the photo.

Genre: Urban Fantasy/Humor
Word Count: 100

Copyright-Al Forbes

Mercury In Retrograde

“Is that a pagan deity?” asked Petra, looking at the sculpted head.

“Yes, it’s Mercury, god of communication,” said Danielle.

“You said its name!”

“Don’t worry, they’re powerless, but our organization teaches about the dangers of these vile things. For instance, it’s idol worship like that, that caused the fall of Rome. Here, let me show you.” She pulled out her cell phone. “Poo! I’ve got no bars.”

“Me too,” groaned Petra. “How? In downtown?”

Both women shrieked and dropped their phones when smoke rose from the devices.

Petra looked up again at the sculpture. “Is that face…smirking now?”

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Each week, the Friday Fictioneers join in literary communion to imagine tales up to 100 words long from a photo prompt. Anyone may join this release of imaginative energies for fun and fascination. Here’s this week’s prompt: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/11/06/8-november-2013/

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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60 Responses to Mercury In Retrograde – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Ah yes the God of communication devices. I think we need to mass produce one or two.
    Well done

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  2. Adorable take on the prompt where modern day technology is made useless by old school gods!

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  3. Linda Vernon says:

    Oh! Yes on second glance and after reading your clever take, I believe that is a smirk!

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  4. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Funny stuff, hubris. One small critique — there’s a comma in the last sentence that doesn’t belong.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Yes it is. Hubris can get you into all sorts of trouble.

      I agree that the comma is not strictly grammatically correct, but I placed it there as a pause to highlight the last two words. Viewed in that way, do you feel it is still disruptive?

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      • Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

        I’d say use an ellipsis then darling (otherwise known as a dot dot dot…). Commas aren’t to be used for pauses like this (but listen to me talking like an English professor — I actually only know this because I had to look up proper comma use not that long ago when I was editing someone’s work.)

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      • EagleAye says:

        Hehe. We’re all here to help each other out. Thanks professor. 😉

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      • Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

        and then put “smirking” in italics.

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  5. Linda Vernon says:

    ahahahhaha! Priceless!!LOLOL!!

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  6. Linda Vernon says:

    I may have to print it out and frame it!! Ahahah!

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  7. DCTdesigns says:

    Very funny. I suppose the God of communication needs a new approach in the modern age for smiting.

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  8. Steve Lakey says:

    An”old school” lesson in communication! Really enjoyed this.

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  9. kz says:

    lol. and damn,that IS a pretty creepy smirk!

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  10. That was great with the photograph. I liked the story too.

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  11. Indira says:

    OMG! It is really smirking. How did you do it. Great. God of communication? Funny. You come up with best stories.

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  12. AnElephant is also smirking now.
    Very amusing.

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  13. Lyn says:

    I didn’t realise you had a lisp 🙂
    Another great story. Very cleaver piece of photo manipulation.

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  14. atrm61 says:

    Aha ha!Never mess with Pagan Gods -specially if you depend so much on communication,ha!ha!A great take on the prompt and I enjoyed every bit EA:-)

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  15. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear EA,

    A master of Photoshop? Very cool and very apt. The first ‘its’ needs to be apostropheless, the second one is cool. The whole story is great. So, well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • EagleAye says:

      Good catch, Doug! I fixed that. I actually used a very easy and free program. I do enjoy graphics so I keep some handy tools like that around. Thanks much for your thoughts!

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  16. Dear E. A.,

    The photo shopped photo alone made the story for me. Too funny. Good story. Starting my day with a smile.

    One grammatical issue. Did you mean to say “it is name” if not then it should be “its name”.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  17. Sandra says:

    Clever story, and artwork! 🙂

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  18. Jan Brown says:

    Very creative! Love the smirk….

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  19. Eek! Great story – and ten I looked at the photo…. Well done, sir!

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  20. Adam Ickes says:

    Good on Mercury for updating his skillset to include frying cellphones of the disrespectful. So few people would own working phones if this tale were true.

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  21. CherryPickens says:

    I love the extra effort of adding the smirk to the statue. I also like knowing that scoffing the gods will burn up those dadgum cell phones. Nicely done.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Thank you kindly, Cherry. Once I imagined it, inspired by Linda Vernon, I couldn’t resist adding the smirk. It’s always a good idea to respect the gods, especially those of cell phones and printers. 😉

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  22. Oh he Mercury sees through all the I phony of communication

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  23. Shey says:

    Powerless, eh? *smirk (hehehe)

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  24. Great ending. I think I’d get a ladder and see how he is against slegehammers. 🙂

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  25. pattisj says:

    Ha! Nice touch!

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