Now He Tells Me: Friday Fictioneers

Written for the Friday Fictioneers. A story about judging a book begins after the photo.

Genre: Espionage/Humor
Word Count: 100

Now He Tells Me

“Avalon-Two, is the package there?”

“Nothing,” said Zimmerman. “Just two hot hookers at the far end.”

“That’s the package!”

“Seriously? That little beauty is a weapons designer?”

“Just make the sign.”

Zimmerman lit a cigarette as planned. The two women approached and the little one said, “Svetya Porisova.”

“You’re the scientist?”

She sighed. “Of course!”

The other beauty held up her hand. “Time to pay courier.”

“Riiiight. Piss-off, sweety.”

Zimmerman woke up on the ground. His head throbbed. The payment was gone.

“Two! Did you pay the courier?”

“Um…seems so.”

“Good. She’s nasty if you don’t.”

Now he tells me.

The Friday Fictioneers come together each week for fun with the written word and 100 words or less of flash fiction. Come on and join us! Here’s this week’s prompt:

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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30 Responses to Now He Tells Me: Friday Fictioneers

  1. Al says:

    Haha brilliant 😀


  2. wmqcolby says:

    Hey! This is GREAT! Very suspenseful, then funny, too. I like this one! Thanks for writing it.


  3. Subroto says:

    Brilliant and a true comic touch.


  4. Oh, I loved your story. I love spies and I love couriers – the whole bit. good job, although it looks to me like the guy lost the package…


    • EagleAye says:

      Me too. I love a good spy story. I ran out of permitted words so I couldn’t and the remaining details, but the “package” was impatiently tapping her foot beside his head when he woke up. The scientist was beginning to doubt Zimmerman’s competence, especially after he insulted her competence.

      Thanks kindly for commenting!


  5. zookyworld says:

    Ouch! Talk about a dangerous package!


  6. Great little story. Loved it.


  7. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Always pay the hooker first.


  8. atrm61 says:

    Ha!ha!Loved this-well crafted:-)


  9. Information you coulda used first! Lol


    • EagleAye says:

      Definitely. Though somebody should learn not to underestimate people in the field. There’s often a painful lesson in learning a person’s true capabilities.

      Thanks for stopping in!


  10. HA! Made me think of “James Bond” with a “Get Smart” twist!


  11. Eena says:

    Two is a dirty man with a dirty mouth. I’d have taken his tongue as payment. He was lucky!
    Great story by the way!


  12. Dear E. A.,

    Hell hath not fury like a “scientist” scorned. Good pacing and construction. Well done.




  13. Indira says:

    Very nice title, perfect. Serves him right. You are very good in this genre.


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