Written for the Friday Fictioneers. A little ghost story begins after the photo.
Genre: Urban Fantasy/Humor
Word Count: 100
Photo by: Adam Ickes
Counting Coup
Walking Hawk’s ghost could only touch the corporeal world through his shoes. Walking mostly, he rarely counted coup anymore. He’d forgiven the
wasichu’s greediness. And then…
He found Ned talking loudly beside a Native-American mural. “Yeah, we took their land,” said Ned, smirking. “But hell, we named a football team after ’em. They ought’a be thankful!”
One hour later, Ned squirmed in his straitjacket. “It’s true! Them shoes rose up by themselves and kicked me in the cojones. My teeth too!”
Onlookers never saw the lone pair of shoes perform a coup-counting dance, and walk away with a little skip.
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Every week, the wise and wonderful Rochelle Wisoff-Fields enjoins us to write up to 100 words from an image prompt. Everyone is invited our imagination’s bloom. Here is this week’s prompt: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/12/11/13-december-2013/
EagleAye
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HAHAHAHA Fantastic 😀
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Thanks Al! 😉
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You’re welcome. That cuddly jacket is always a good one to go with the shoes 🙂
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Great story! Creative administration of justice 🙂
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Thank you Jan!
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Love it! Ned got what he deserved.
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He certainly did. Thanks much for swinging by and commenting. 🙂
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Ha! I only wish one would have split off and kicked him in his backside, so we get a “boot to the ass” image 😉 Great take on the prompt!
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Actually, I was intending for Ned to say, “yeah, we kicked their injun butts.” And in return, he gets kicked hard in the butt. I ran out of words quick though, and had to streamline.
Thanks bunches for your thoughts and comments!
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Haha! I know all about counting coup from reading a zillion stories about Indians while I was growing up. More Indian revenge.
janet
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Most cool to hear about that. A lot of people aren’t familiar with the term. Thanks much for your thoughts.
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hahaha loved this. fun read. 🙂
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Thanks KZ!
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Yaay! TOUCHDOWN!
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Haha! A score for the Chiefs!
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You’ve got to love those shoes! Nice one.
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Thanks so much, Sandra. 🙂
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Revenge can be sweet… especially when dealing with a real @$$hole! Nice job. 🙂
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It most definitely can! Thanks so much for visiting and your thoughts!
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Always a pleasure, EagleAye
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Dear E. A.
Revenge, one ignorant redneck at a time. Sweet!
shalom,
Rochelle
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It’ll take time, but Walking Hawk’s ghost has a lot of that. Thanks so much for your comments, Rochelle! 🙂
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Thanks for the links. Your stories are informative too. Loved the straitjacket part.
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My pleasure as always Indira. Thanks kindly for stopping in!
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Ha!ha!So funny EA!So much for Ned’s smart -ass remarks and “honest” confessions-he should have kept his big mouth shut-both the times 😉
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He really should have (both times 🙂 ). Walking Hawk would have never noticed him otherwise. Some folks just can’t keep it shut. Thanks so much for stopping in!
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Ha!ha!So true-foot & mouth disease 😉
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Perfect…love the shoes dancing away … that was sure one way to take revenge..
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Thanks much, Bjorn!
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I love this! The kick was well deserved! Great commentary, too. Your humorous delivery gives it even more power.
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Yeah, I think he deserved a particularly nasty kick. Thanks so much for the encouraging critique!
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A very entertaining story, Eric. Quite enjoyable.
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Thank you! It’s good to hear you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Ned ended up with not only his foot but someone else’s in his mouth
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Haha! Indeed he did. Only someone with a really big mouth could manage something like that. It’s only fitting. 😉
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I think used to date him!
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I think I dated his sister… 😉
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OMG…awesome comeback!!!
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