The Getaway – Friday Fictioneers

Written for the Friday Fictioneers. A story about an unusual plan to escape the police begins after the photo.

Genre: Crime/Humor

Photo by: Sandra Crook

The Getaway

“Are you certain this will work?” said Callie.

“Of course!” said Rupert. “It’s perfect for making a getaway with the diamonds. No car chases, no airport security.”

“But these hay bales stink!”

“We’ll just wait inside the bales until they’re delivered to some farm, far from security, and most importantly, no where near any cops.” said Rupert. “This can’t fail.”

After waiting an hour the jostling hay bale cart finally stopped. They heard the driver speak with someone.

“Busy day in the stables?”

“You see?” whispered Rupert.

“Always is with hundreds of cops collecting their horses for their daily patrol.”
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Every Wednesday, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields leads the Friday Fictioneers to the lush fields of our imagination. There, ideas are harvested and collected into bales of flash fiction stories 100 words long. We’d love to have you join us a-grain and a-grain! Here’s this week’s prompt: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/02/26/28-february-2014/

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About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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37 Responses to The Getaway – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Lyn says:

    LOL oh dear, are they ever in for a shock. I’m not sure if I feel sorry for them or not – depends on who they nicked the diamonds from. Nice twist as always, Eric πŸ™‚

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    • EagleAye says:

      That does make a difference, doesn’t it. In any event, Rupert’s escape plane wasn’t nearly as foolproof as he believed. Glad you enjoyed the twist. Thanks for reading, Lyn!

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  2. Haha well that’s not going to work out for them too well!

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    • EagleAye says:

      No it won’t. Instead of staying away from police, they’ve delivered themselves straight into their hands! Yikes. Thanks so much for stopping in and reading. πŸ™‚

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  3. Surprise, Surprise. I guess it won’t be a perfect crime today. Great story.

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  4. Adam Ickes says:

    If they play it right, there’s the chance they could get away with it. The cops don’t know they have the diamonds (as far as I can tell) and if they aren’t seen getting out of the hay they might be able to pass as stable hands. Or there is the option of waiting long into the night until few, if any people are still around. There is still hope yet… until there isn’t.

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    • EagleAye says:

      True enough. If they play their cards right they might still make it out of there. At the moment though, I think their guts just turned to water. Thanks for stopping in, Adam! πŸ™‚

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  5. Indira says:

    Lol, another humorous tale from your magic brain. smelling stinking hay for nothing, poor fellows.

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  6. Ouch. A caper gone badly wrong. Clever one.

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  7. Helen Midgley wrote a successful caper, and you’ve written a foiled one. Great!

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    • EagleAye says:

      How cool! I’ll have to check that one out. It’s interesting that both of us should think of a caper. Thanks for stopping in, Helena. I always enjoy a visit from you. πŸ™‚

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  8. Anyone who thinks hay stinks (and steals diamonds) deserves what they get! Good one/

    janet

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  9. pattisj says:

    Nice story, and a surprise ending for your burglars. Loved your closing paragraph, I could read it a-grain and a-grain.

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  10. Oh dear – the pitfalls of leaving important details to chance ….
    I enjoyed reading your story.

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  11. Jan Brown says:

    Good one! Karma’s a bitch….

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  12. atrm61 says:

    Ha!ha!What an irony of fate-reminds me of a proverb we have in our community-“Night falls,just where we fear the tigers!” :-)Good one again Eric:-)

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  13. Good story and well done. This is one story where it seems crime really didn’t pay.

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  14. Dear Eric,

    “T’would seem that a few of us have taken the Karma out for a drive this week. πŸ˜‰ Hope the horses don’t choke on the diamonds. good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  15. Oops! Looks like the poor thieves are out of luck the flawless plan wasn’t that perfect at all! Good job with the prompt!

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  16. Amy Reese says:

    Ha!! Their plan is foiled. Great twist at the end and a fun story.

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  17. sandraconner says:

    It’s what happens when you ride where you can’t see the road and know where you’re going. Good humor! I liked it.

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  18. Shey says:

    Uh-oh! Busted!

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