Too Intelligent – Friday Fictioneers

Written for the Friday Fictioneers. A story, about a genetic enhancement gone awry, begins after the photo.

Genre: Science Fiction/Humor

Photo by: Erin Leary

Too Intelligent

Kerry joined the old rancher at the fence overlooking the beautiful property. “So. You ready to buy another Intelligent Horse?”

Gabe chewed on a grass leaf. “Don’t know about that.”

“Why not? They can talk to you. Understand complex instructions. What could be better?”

“Yeah, but t’other day, Lindy threw his rider off.”

“Lindy Lou? I don’t believe it. He’s such a friendly horse.”

Gabe spat. “I don’t think he meant no harm.”

Kerry looked furtively for a creeping lawyer. “So what happened?”

“Well, Lindy was havin’ so much fun galloping, he hadda stop suddenly and update his Twitter account!”
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Author’s Note: Yes, I know there’s a double-negative in here. But you get what Gabe was saying and saying it that way fits Gabe.

Each week, the Friday Fictioneers join together for fun, frolic, fotos, and flash fiction. Won’t you join us too? This week’s prompt can be found here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/05/21/23-may-2014/

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About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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59 Responses to Too Intelligent – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Honie Briggs says:

    I understand Gabe perfectly. Nice dialogue, Eric.

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  2. The horse with a Twitter account. What will you think of next?

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    • EagleAye says:

      Talking spider that writes messages in her web to defend a talking pig? Nah, nobody would ever buy into that. πŸ˜‰ Thanks so much for stopping in, Helena! πŸ™‚

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  3. List of X says:

    I’m sure that the next generation of intelligent horses will be able to ride and update Twitter at the same time.

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  4. I think that Lindy should stop horsing around in cyberspace.. I think I will retweet though…

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    • EagleAye says:

      Lindy might say neigh to you, especially if he gets lots of re-tweets. He’s pretty popular just now. πŸ˜‰ Thanks much for stopping, Bjorn! πŸ™‚

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  5. Thank goodness none of our horses are of this generation. Long may they remain Twitter-less or say neigh to the internet.

    janet

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    • EagleAye says:

      Indeed, because twittering while galloping is a bunch of horse-hockey. Yes, keep your horses away from cell-phones. πŸ˜‰ Thanks much for the visit, Janet!

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  6. Indira says:

    Its so much fun to read your stories. It started so innocently. Nice punch in the end.That’s the problem with too much intelligence.

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  7. Lyn says:

    Oh dear…:-D

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  8. Lyn says:

    Oh dear… πŸ™‚

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  9. MM Jaye says:

    Flash fiction that packs a … gallop! Greetings from Greece!

    Maria (MM Jaye)

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    • EagleAye says:

      Haha! Yup, flash fiction that’s just horsin’ around. πŸ˜‰ Hello to Greece! I’ll bet you’ve got a terrific view out there. Are the gyros there wonderful? I love those. Thanks for stopping to visit, Maria! I appreciate it.

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  10. wmqcolby says:

    Hahahahaha! Gone awry indeed. Well-done!

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  11. I came across few horses on Tweeter…so I say to you – very believable story! πŸ˜€

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  12. The Manoj Arora says:

    Excellent! Wonder what he was tweeting about.! Love it. By the way…

    I write too. Please do read mine (short story) when u have the time:

    http://yourstoryclub.com/short-stories-love/love-short-story-grampas-tale/

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  13. Danny James says:

    Twitter, huh. Seems I remember a recent post of yours when someone had to update their Facebook status. Next up…Google +….?

    DJ

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  14. He shouldn’t be trotting and tweeting in the first place.

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  15. That’s great and the voices worked. Nice one.

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  16. OMG! This made me laugh! Thanks.

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  17. That was a great ending. Hopefully for us, animals are never our equals in that. We produce enough mindless drivel without them. πŸ™‚

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  18. Dear Eric,

    How ya gonna keep ’em down on the farm once they’ve discovered the net? You made snort and choke at the same time. I’m only glad I wasn’t in mid sip or coffee would definitely have spurted from my nose.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • EagleAye says:

      Oh, it’s easy once they discover the net. They don’t go anywhere. They don’t even want to outside too much, especially once they discover the playstation. πŸ˜‰ Be careful about drinking coffee while reading the words of a madman. πŸ˜‰ Thanks so much for visiting, Rochelle!

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  19. Eric, Funny story and good dialogue. Horses on the internet could surely be a problem expecially if no one knew they were horses. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • EagleAye says:

      Thanks Susan! I don’t know if they would be a problem per se. It might be good to get info straight from the horse’s mouth *ahem* As long as they aren’t texting and trotting I suppose it would be alright. πŸ˜‰

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  20. atrm61 says:

    Ha!ha!Lindy needs to be told only birds twitter-am sure that will make him stop and ask Whatsup? πŸ˜‰

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  21. elappleby says:

    Funny! Love the idea of an Intelligent Horse – are other intelligent animals available? If so, they could run the place themselves and give the farmer a break (although it sounds like they’d be too busy social networking!)

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    • EagleAye says:

      They tried that once, and a pig ended up taking over the place. πŸ˜‰ Maybe with social net working they’d be too busy texting to get anything done? Hehe. Thanks much for stopping in!

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  22. Eric, this one is really fun! Very clever dialogue, great back and forth! The double negative does work… and I’ve been defending the use of poor grammar for character development, on my own piece! A funny twist at the end. Nice job!

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  23. Lucy says:

    I’m still laughing. Update Twitter account–that’s funny. Very good. Lucy

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  24. EditMoi says:

    Oh, a horse on Twitter…what will you think of next? I loved the apology for the double negative at the end. You make me laugh! πŸ™‚

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    • EagleAye says:

      Oh, stayed tuned. There’s no limit to what my whacky brain might come up with. πŸ˜‰ Glad you got a laugh, that’s what I’m aiming for. Thanks much for reading!

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  25. I loved your scifi take on the prompt. Ranchers talking over fences, chewing straws and contemplating the “Intelligent” Horse – grappling with social media.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Hehe. A curious mix of elements, eh? Who knows? It may be our future someday, though it could be problematic for rodeos. What if horses started texting during the show? πŸ˜‰ Thanks much for stopping in!

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  26. why not..they say phones are intelligent…hashtag # horsesense ..

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  27. nightlake says:

    Horses seem to be more techno-savvy than some humans. looks like a super-cool horse. great read

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  28. Ah, the perils of riding intelligent horses!

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