Big Trouble – Friday Fictioneers

Photo by: Janet Webb

Big Trouble

Felix was in Big Trouble. He glanced at the ice, coating the tree’s blossoms. At least that mistake would melt away in the scorching July heat.

He peered around the tree. The other mistake was still there. In all honesty, Felix acted in self-defense. The four school bullies were trying to steal it, and beat him bloody again.

Felix sighed. He should never have stolen Dad’s Transmuting Gun. He clicked the reverse-switch, and waited to fix his mistake.

Nearby, the Park Supervisor scratched his head, wondering how they got there. Though confused, he still liked the addition of four bronze statues.
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Each week, the Friday Fictioneers meet in a park to try out our latest inventions on unsuspecting park-goers. Not really, but that would be fun. Instead, we write flash fiction based upon an image prompt. Look here for more stories based upon Janet Webb’s great photo above: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/12/03/5-december-2014/

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About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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28 Responses to Big Trouble – Friday Fictioneers

  1. storydivamg says:

    Awesome story! As long as no one reports the boys missing, I think our young hero has acted appropriately. It was high time those bullies learned a lesson.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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    • EagleAye says:

      Thank you! The reverse switch on the gun worked well so the bullies were restored to normal, but Felix gave them a scare they’ll never forget. Felix was never hassled by them again. They really did need a lesson, and they got it. Thanks for stopping in! πŸ™‚

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  2. Fun! I was anxious to see what the other mistake was. Kudos.

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  3. Ha.. yes that might be an appropriate ending for sure.

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  4. He must have been tempted to leave them as they were, though it sounds like he was a good guy who would do the right thing. How cool to have a Dad who owns a Transmuting Gun.Now if only I could get my hands on one of those for a day …..

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    • EagleAye says:

      Felix is actually a good kid, just learning things the way kids do, except doing it with a transmuting gun. Although, if the bullies don’t learn from their mistakes, Felix might not be so kind. There’s other settings after all. πŸ˜‰ I’d like a gun like that too. I’ve got an old shirt that might be worth “gold.” Thanks for stopping by! πŸ™‚

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  5. JED says:

    He says the mistake, but I wonder! Sounds like he might have had a bit of purpose planned. They deserved it though so I understand. Great story.

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    • EagleAye says:

      They definitely deserved something bad happening. Felix never intended to harm anyone, just play about with something cool. Things got out of hand and not the way the bullies expected. C’est la Vie! Glad you liked it, and thanks for swinging by! πŸ™‚

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  6. Lyn says:

    I think he should leave them like that for a few days, Eric. At least until some pigeons have paid them a few generous visits πŸ˜€

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    • EagleAye says:

      Perhaps a few “waterings” from the local stray dogs as well. I’m happy to see my fellow writers see bullies as creatures deserving of something awful.

      Funny thing about being returned from being bronzed: the headache afterward makes a migraine feel like a love tap. Just to be sure the lesson is learned well, Felix might restore them, let them writhe a few minutes, turn them to bronze again, restore…repeat…repeat.

      In this story, I decided to give the baddies a break since they are in their middle-teens and therefore “potentially” redeemable. I think my next bad guy will not have such luck. πŸ˜‰ Thanks so much, Lyn!

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  7. wildbilbo says:

    I’m with everyone else – Bullies don’t attract a lot of sympathy from me either. I’d have been tempted to bring the 4 statutes to a ‘pigeon heavy area’.

    Cheers
    KT

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    • EagleAye says:

      Hehe. It could be fun to bring them to the coast with all that salt water air, and watch them turn green. You’d have a bunch of Seagulls to add to the Pigeon traffic. Glad to know you’re with the crowd on bullies. I’ll take care of them. Thanks for stopping by! πŸ™‚

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  8. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear EA,

    I’m with KT on this one. No reason to undo what has been done. Four less bullies is a big job off to a good start. Great story.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • EagleAye says:

      Perhaps Felix has found his vocation, and his weapon of choice, and this is just the beginning. I’ll add another “thumbs down” to the tally. Thanks so much, Doug! πŸ™‚

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  9. Dear Eric,

    Well, the bullies’ parents might miss them. πŸ˜‰

    I applaud your knack for stepping outside the box and then stomping it to mulch. Clever story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • EagleAye says:

      Haha! Yes I do enjoy doing that. Call me an escape artist for spending so much time outside the box. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks very much for your thoughts! πŸ™‚

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  10. Hope the bullies have learnt their lesson – assuming he does reverse the process.
    The introduction of the Supervisor really brought this story to life.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Well, if they don’t, Felix still has the Transmuting Gun. The supervisor was a necessary device to make the story work. Glad to know he helped the story along as intended, Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts! πŸ™‚

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  11. Margaret says:

    Such a clever idea, and successfully executed. Oops – maybe not executed. Successfully transmuted to the page perhaps? Loved it.

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