Facade – Mondays Finish The Story

Photo by: Barbara W. Beacham


The house of Don Francisco sat in a remote part of the desert. Kirkum, a 16-year veteran, grimaced at the sprawling, beautiful mansion. “They say seven teams went in and never came out alive.”

“So why did they go in in the first place?” said newbie FBI Agent, Holcomb.

Kirkum looked at him like he was stupid, “Because no Agent ever returned!”

Holcomb stayed quiet. People who can’t identify circular arguments are hard to negotiate with.

Kirkum said, “You stay here. We’re going in.” He and twenty other agents charged the house and crashed in, disappearing from sight. Hours later, Holcomb still couldn’t reach them on radio.


At a tiny house on the next hill, Juanita Francisco frowned. “Another bunch just went in.”

Don Francisco groaned.

“You’ll have to remove it, you know,” she said.

“You’re right,” sighed Don Francisco. “I thought it would be pretty.”

“I know, but the FBI doesn’t understand that hologram covers up the unattractive, yet bottomless sinkhole!”
Each week on Monday it’s time to finish the story. This week, the opening sentence is, “The house of Don Francisco sat in a remote part of the desert.” The media prompt is the photo above taken by the talented Barbara Beacham. Look here for more stories based upon the prompts: http://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2014/12/29/mondays-finish-the-story-december-29th-2014/

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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22 Responses to Facade – Mondays Finish The Story

  1. babso2you says:

    Great story! I was not expecting that ending at all! Well done! Thank you again for participating and stay tuned for next week’s challenge! Be well! Happy New Year too! ^..^

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  2. You don’t always become a law enforcement officer because of your intelligence do you, I think its one of life’s oxymorons isn’t it, intelligence services.

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    • EagleAye says:

      It certainly can be. Some guys are recruited more for their outstanding patriotism than for their creative thinking. Sometimes “The Book” doesn’t have all the answers and Agents must think outside the box. Thanks much for stopping in! 🙂


  3. Great twist ending! I wonder if any Corvettes were down the sinkhole as well?

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  4. I love the circle reasoning.. I guess there will be less and less agents.. sounds like a black hole for law enforcement.

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    • EagleAye says:

      It kinda is, but to be more specific it’s a black hole for “stupid” agents. Holcomb (with the habit of asking pertinent questions) never fell into it. He ended up writing the final report, having survived long enough to write one. 😉 Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for stopping by! 🙂


  5. What an unexpected ending. Awesome job!

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  6. John Yeo says:

    I gasped at the brilliant ending, I never saw that coming~ Great writing EagleAye~:)

    Liked by 1 person

  7. draliman says:

    Great unexpected ending! That’s law enforcement for you 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  8. yarnspinnerr says:

    The twist in the tale was superb.

    Liked by 1 person

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