Facade
The house of Don Francisco sat in a remote part of the desert. Kirkum, a 16-year veteran, grimaced at the sprawling, beautiful mansion. “They say seven teams went in and never came out alive.”
“So why did they go in in the first place?” said newbie FBI Agent, Holcomb.
Kirkum looked at him like he was stupid, “Because no Agent ever returned!”
Holcomb stayed quiet. People who can’t identify circular arguments are hard to negotiate with.
Kirkum said, “You stay here. We’re going in.” He and twenty other agents charged the house and crashed in, disappearing from sight. Hours later, Holcomb still couldn’t reach them on radio.
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At a tiny house on the next hill, Juanita Francisco frowned. “Another bunch just went in.”
Don Francisco groaned.
“You’ll have to remove it, you know,” she said.
“You’re right,” sighed Don Francisco. “I thought it would be pretty.”
“I know, but the FBI doesn’t understand that hologram covers up the unattractive, yet bottomless sinkhole!”
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Each week on Monday it’s time to finish the story. This week, the opening sentence is, “The house of Don Francisco sat in a remote part of the desert.” The media prompt is the photo above taken by the talented Barbara Beacham. Look here for more stories based upon the prompts: http://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2014/12/29/mondays-finish-the-story-december-29th-2014/
Great story! I was not expecting that ending at all! Well done! Thank you again for participating and stay tuned for next week’s challenge! Be well! Happy New Year too! ^..^
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Thank you! Glad I could catch you off-guard. Thanks for the visit, I’ll be by next time too. 🙂 Happy New Year!
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Right back at you! I look forward to what you come up with on the next challenge!
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You don’t always become a law enforcement officer because of your intelligence do you, I think its one of life’s oxymorons isn’t it, intelligence services.
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It certainly can be. Some guys are recruited more for their outstanding patriotism than for their creative thinking. Sometimes “The Book” doesn’t have all the answers and Agents must think outside the box. Thanks much for stopping in! 🙂
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Great twist ending! I wonder if any Corvettes were down the sinkhole as well?
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Sorry, no. A few black Ford Bronco with FBI plates and three Harley-Davidson motorcycles. Glad you liked the twist. Thanks much Matthew! 🙂
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I love the circle reasoning.. I guess there will be less and less agents.. sounds like a black hole for law enforcement.
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It kinda is, but to be more specific it’s a black hole for “stupid” agents. Holcomb (with the habit of asking pertinent questions) never fell into it. He ended up writing the final report, having survived long enough to write one. 😉 Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for stopping by! 🙂
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What an unexpected ending. Awesome job!
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it! 🙂
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I gasped at the brilliant ending, I never saw that coming~ Great writing EagleAye~:)
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Thank you so much! I like to keep readers on their toes with surprises if I can. Glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Great unexpected ending! That’s law enforcement for you 🙂
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Yep. Woopsie! Glad I could surprise you. Thanks much, and Happy New Year! 🙂
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The twist in the tale was superb.
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Thank you kindly! 🙂
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Nice one.
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Thanks Indira! 🙂
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Wish you a very Happy New Year.
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Thank you much, and a Happy New Year to you too! 🙂
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Thanks.
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