Low Tech – Mondays Finish The Story

Photo by: Barbara W. Beacham

Low Tech

They finally made their escape. “I love Alaska!” crowed Ben. He counted the stolen bank money while Dan drove the stolen Range Rover. “They’re so low-tech here, and these fools don’t even lock their cars.”

Unknowingly, they’d stolen Sheriff Barker’s 2021 Range Rover (Security Edition).

They were amazed when the car suddenly locked itself. They were further shocked when it started driving itself. The car raced through some of the roughest terrain in the county. The men were hurled violently around the interior as they crashed across ravines and boulder fields. After two hours of mad careening the two collectively had sprained knees, twisted ankles, bruised ribs, a concussion, and a broken elbow.


At the Sheriff’s station, Sheriff Barker tapped his pad, directing the Range Rover where to drive itself next. Deputy Cullen said, “You get your Rover back yet, Sheriff?”

“Nope,” said Barker, switching to the Rover’s internal cameras. “I’m havin’ too much fun!”
I hope you had fun reading this. I had fun writing it. Every Monday, it’s time to finish the story with a photo and a first sentence as a prompt. This week the first sentence must be, “They finally made their escape.” The splash photo for this post is the image prompt. Look here for more stories based on the prompts: https://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2015/01/19/mondays-finish-the-story-january-19th-2015/

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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22 Responses to Low Tech – Mondays Finish The Story

  1. afairymind says:

    That was definitely the wrong car to steal! 🙂


  2. John Yeo says:

    Will the survive the vengeance meted out by the sherrif? I think the hospital will be the next stop ~ Brilliant story ~


    • EagleAye says:

      Oh they’ll survive, although they’ll wish they hadn’t. They will indeed need a visit to the hospital, followed by a lawyer. Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the visit. 🙂


  3. babso2you says:

    LOL! Great story Eric! I love that the Sheriff has not only the ability to tell the car where to go, but that he can watch the thieves! Such an imagination! Thanks for taking part again, and stay tuned for next week’s challenge! Be well – ^..^

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  4. Oh Danny Boy says:

    Ah…the Security Edition. I priced it but out of my league.



  5. I loved this that idea is such a good one and yes I can imagine the sheriff having so much fun. Excellent idea.

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  6. draliman says:

    I loved this! “Range Rover (Security Edition)” – the ultimate cop car. I love the way he’s flinging them round corners like it’s some sort of video game 🙂 They’ll be desperate to climb into a nice safe cell by the time he finally brings them in.


    • EagleAye says:

      Oh yes, he didn’t even need to interrogate them. They were in a rush to confess all. Anything to get out of the car. They were terrified of it. Maybe one day, we’ll see a real version of this. Glad you liked it, and thanks much for the wonderful comments! 🙂


      • draliman says:

        It’s like those “capture cars” used to catch car thieves where the doors lock and the police are waiting round the corner, but with more fun attached!

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      • EagleAye says:

        That’s exactly what inspired me. I thought, “What if you took that to a higher level? And how could you have fun with it? ” Even Sheriff’s have to have some entertainment. 😉


  7. milliethom says:

    A really fun story, EagleAye. I love the character of Sheriff Barker, with his mischievous streak – which comes across brilliantly in the last sentence. The description of the two ‘crooks’ being bounced around inside a very determined car is hilarious. Great read.

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  8. Shannon says:

    Oh my god, it’s like Bait Car: Alaskan Sarcasm Edition 🙂


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