Breast Stroke – Mondays Finish the Story

Photo by: Barbara W. Beacham

Breast Stroke

When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety. In moments, they stood on shore.

“Folks,” said Tour Captain Monticello. “On behalf of Temporal Adventure Tours, I apologize. Seems the Three Gorges Dam did not explode in the afternoon of April 4, 2044. It was the morning as you can see.” He pointed to the pall of black smoke upstream.
“Our rafting tour to 207 years ago has been cut short.”

He looked sternly at their three rafting guests. “Now all of you have your temporal transponders, right? You can’t beam to safety without them.”

Two nodded. Benny Henreddy shook his head. “I lost it!”

Monticello winced sympathetically. “That’s a damn shame, son.”

“Hold on. I’m a billionaire. Give me one of yours! I’ll pay you!”

Everyone else beamed away without responding. Monticello shook his head. “Sorry, son.”

“But what should I do?” screamed Benny.

Monticello looked up at the murderous wall of water fast approaching. “Breast stroke, I’d say.”
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Author’s Notes:
Three Gorges Dam: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Three_Gorges_Dam

Every Monday it’s time to finish the story based upon a photo by the talented Barbara W. Beacham. This week, the beginning sentence is, “When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety.” It’s up to us to run with it from there. Look here for more stories answering the challenge: https://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2015/03/23/mondays-finish-the-story-march-23rd-2015/

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About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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43 Responses to Breast Stroke – Mondays Finish the Story

  1. babso2you says:

    Another story where the last line had both me and my husband laughing! Well done again Eric! Thanks again for participating and I hope to see you next week… Be well… ^..^

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  2. You hit the bullseye every single time! Poor guy, he’s going to be breast stroking his way back to 1837! I loved it (as always).

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  3. Joiya Reid says:

    Really unexpected plot twist that had me laughing. Poor boy, I can only imagine how he looked at Monticello lol

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  4. Excellent twist! Curiously, there’s a dam in NZ, one of the big hydro installations, that turns out to have been built on a fault line. The engineers are confident it’s safe, which makes me more confident. But…uh…there’s just that chance that, you know, it might not exactly pan out as calculated…

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    • EagleAye says:

      Uh yeah, I think I wouldn’t live downstream from it no matter how confident the engineers are. Fault lines have this habit of, you know, shifting suddenly. Eek! 😀

      Glad you enjoyed the twist. Thanks kindly! 🙂

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  5. phylor says:

    Nice to know money can’t buy you two things: happiness and a temporal transponder. Almost midnight, so I had to laugh quietly.
    Thoroughly enjoyable!

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  6. Tastyniblets says:

    Oh well, there goes the insurance premium Monticello! That was a clever twist on the prompt, good one!

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    • EagleAye says:

      Oh yeah, but I expect he had to sign a release form absolving them of all liability. I expect the news will cover the event extensively. Glad you know you enjoyed this. Thanks very much! 🙂

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  7. Lyn says:

    LOL exactly what we’ve come to expect from you, Eric 🙂 Perhaps Benny could wrap his arms around Monticello a whisker before he winks out.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Wouldn’t work. The transponder is coded to specific DNA. Thus, things like dangerous bacteria are removed during transport. So yeah, Benny is on his own and trying to learn the breast stroke very very quickly! 😉 Thanks so much, Lyn. Cheers! 🙂

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      • Lyn says:

        The Star Trek writers didn’t think of that when they wrote The Voyage Home did they 🙂

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      • EagleAye says:

        Aha! You watch your movies very carefully don’t you. Yeah, when the doc grabs Kirk while he’s beaming up, I wonder should that be possible. If that would happen, wouldn’t diseases, poisonous atmosphere, microbes, radiation, and other nasties come up every time they beamed up? I don’t think the buffers in the transporter would allow it. Oh well, it was fun for the movie plot anyway.

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  8. Love the time-travel angle 😀

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  9. Sonya says:

    Funny as usual and a nice take on the prompt. I like the idea that they discover a historical inaccuracy. Great last line 🙂

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  10. afairymind says:

    Love this! Time travel stories are always my favourites. 🙂 I wonder whether Benny will ever find his transponder and make his way home. Being a billionaire in the future won’t help him much if he’s stuck in 2044!

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    • EagleAye says:

      Exactly! Money is no help in such situations. Knowledge of swimming would be really helpful as this moment. 😉 If he survives, he might look for his transponder, but that’s a really big ‘if!’ Thanks so much. I’m glad you had fun. 🙂

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  11. As usual, it is a laugh and a smile from me! Monticello’s answer is very witty.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Awesome. That’s what I was hoping for. Monticello was witty, but it was the only answer from his viewpoint. He wanted to say, “Die nobly, sir,” but decided against it. Glad you got a laugh. Thanks kindly! 🙂

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  12. Breast stroke and lot of deep breaths….great take this week….

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    • EagleAye says:

      Oh yes. Holding his breath will be critical if he expects to survive. Unfortunately, there’s all those logs swirling around like baseball bats for giants. Yikers! Glad you liked this. Thanks so much! 🙂

      Like

  13. milliethom says:

    Ooh … what a mean man that Monticello is. So I suppose Benny’s survival depends on how good he is at Breaststroke – and dodging all the obstacles with murderous intent Great idea, too, to set the story in the future. Excellent story. 🙂

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    • EagleAye says:

      He’s not really that mean, there simply isn’t any other option. Benny needs to swim for his life. There’s no other way around it. I’m happy you enjoyed the story. Thanks bunches! 🙂

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  14. Bynda says:

    I love your take on things!

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  15. rogershipp says:

    Full Belly Laugh. Thanks!

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  16. Looks like carelessness did him in. Even if he survives the water, who knows what else he’ll experience 200 years from now. Amusing, creative, and well done, Eric. 😀 — Suzanne

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  17. Indira says:

    Now he will learn ‘ money cannot buy everything.’ Very nice.

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