Thorough Study (Unabridged)

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Thorough Study (Unabridged)

Arriving at the beach, she reflected on her life.

Elena Yarrow’s admission scores for the Star Academy were the highest ever recorded. She graduated top of her class. Her paper on Inertial Compensator Efficiency revolutionized starship design. So how did she end up with a posting involving filing? Filing? Her pleas for missions of import were ignored, her requests for transfer, lost.

Her love life was no better. Men lost interest as soon as she mentioned plasma injector design. After her continuous pestering, she was finally given a mission: finding the lost planet of Avalon. Bah! The so-called planet of Granted Wishes? A myth! It was merely something to get her out of the way.

A tall, dark young man with a lovely physique and a smooth, masculine face, strode across the sand and offered her favorite drink. A Cadillac Margarita.

“Thank you, Martine.”

“Of course, My Queen. Perhaps later we can walk along the beach, holding hands, and discussing your thoughts on fusion containment fields.”

“Smashing, Martine,” she grinned.

She paused to examine the wreckage of her landing shuttle beside the treeline. Normally, being stranded on a deserted planet was every starship pilot’s worst nightmare. A terror to imagine. She turned back to Martine and noted he still wore only a thong, and that it could hardly hope to cover…well, THAT much. For a moment, she felt guilty. If she applied herself, she could repair the transponder and call her ship in orbit for help.

It was her her duty to report that she had, in fact, found Avalon. Perhaps her discovery would be met with the same fanfare as her paper on Inertial Compensator Efficiency: a posting involving filing.

One shan’t be too hasty, she told herself.

Perhaps it was mere coincidence that as she idly thought crash-landing on this uncharted planet might be a welcome respite, that the engines failed. Surely it was happenstance that the most desirable male in human history, lived alone on this planet. Certainly it was blind luck that his engineering knowledge was exemplary, and that he found her ideas fascinating. Perhaps it was commonplace in this area of the galaxy that men were thrilled by a woman’s mind as much they lavishly worshiped her body.

Yes, this might not be Avalon after all, mused Elena. “Lower back please, Martine.”

It must be pure accident that Martine’s fingers were so strong, yet so sensitive, and…she moaned…so effective.

Yes, she thought, as Martine’s thong fell away. A careful and thorough study is warranted before reporting in.
This is the unabridged version of a story written for Mondays Finish the Story. You can find the official version here:

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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11 Responses to Thorough Study (Unabridged)

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  2. babso2you says:

    Another good one!

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  3. Mara Fields says:

    Oh, I laughed out loud, and even have moisture in my eyes. I love your subtle way with words that craft a unique character so quickly, and phrasing/pace that leads the reader along into your humor–you don’t leave us behind, we’re right there giggling with you.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Ah! Most cool. I was hoping to drum up a laugh or two. Yeah, I do enjoy leading folks to a happy place where laughs and smiles flow freely. It’s always good to hear those efforts work the way I wanted. I love it when when folks are giggling right along with me. Thanks so very much, Mara! 🙂


  4. afairymind says:

    I love this longer version! well done. 🙂

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  5. Very good, light-hearted SF story, Eric. I, too, enjoyed this long version (the short one was good as well). Reminded me of the planet Risa on ST, but in print form. The pessimist in me, however, wonders what’s in store for her. Where are the other people (besides Martine)? Do their wishes cancel out one another if they are contrary? Anyway, it’s a good thought, with possibilities for more development in one of several genres, really. I’m sure you’ll let us know what direction (if any) you decide to take it!

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    • EagleAye says:

      With only one person on the planet, wishes can’t conflict, although that’s a very good question. What would happen with conflicting wishes? I think parallel dimensions might be the answer. Everybody gets what they want without interfering. Martine isn’t strictly real. He’s the response to a subconscious wish. Strictly speaking, she’s entirely alone. I might pursue this one further, in one form or another. I’m glad you enjoyed this one. I prefer the long pieces because I can include more details, but I still want to stick to Barb’s rules, because it really is a good challenge to limit to 150 words. Glad you liked both, and thanks much! 🙂


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