The Cruel Con – Mondays Finish the Story

Photo by: Barbara W. Beacham

The Cruel Con

The Mayor and the town manager waved as their next victim approached. Stan the salesman pulled up beside them. “Gentlemen,” he said. “It’s been a long drive and I’m exhausted. I need a motel to sleep at. ”

Mayor Bloom smiled a predatory smile. “Try Millie’s Motel, down the road.”

As Stan pulled away, Bloom made a phone call. “Millie? There’s another one comin’. Get #13 ready.”

Stan checked in at Millie’s and was sent to room #13. He opened the door and walked in…only to find a young girl sprawled across the bed. Her skin had the bluish cast of death.

Sheriff Long burst in through the door right after him. “God dammit, boy!” he shouted. “You killed poor little Lolita!”

“I did not!”

“You sure did!”

“I just got here!”

“The evidence says otherwise son!” said Long, and he took him into custody.

Hours later, Sheriff Long watched him drive away. “How much did you get?” said Mayor Bloom.

Long grinned. “Four thousand.”

“Woohoo! Mighty good work, Lolita!”

Lolita stood beside them. Her bluish skin, the result of a rare recessive gene, looked less scary in daylight. She smiled, “Thanks Uncle Bob.”

Town Manager, Lester Givens, was new to the town’s primary income. He said, “What happens next?”

“He’ll have to stop at Burlsville if he wants any sleep,” said Lolita.


“Got a cousin that lives there.”

“Is she blue too?” said Lester.

“Nope. She’s a Stigmata,” smiled Lolita. “Bleeds all over the place…like she’s been murdered.”
Author’s Notes:

Okay, I know I dream up a lot of crazy stuff, but I actually didn’t imagine blue people. There is a historical precedent. A whole family of blue people lived in Hazard, Kentucky:

And then, a Stigmata is another condition documented by the church. Such individuals would spontaneously bleed from their hands, side, and feet from apparent wounds like the ones Jesus Christ experienced when crucified. Such people do not die from this. St. Francis of Assisi was a Stigmata.

This was written for Mondays Finish the Story. During this weekly writing challenge, we are provided with a pic from photographer Barbara W. Beacham and an opening sentence. This week the opener was, “The Mayor and the town manager waved as their next victim approached.” Look here at the blue frog link to see what other folks wrote:

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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30 Responses to The Cruel Con – Mondays Finish the Story

  1. Martin says:

    For a second I though the story’s going somewhere else (possibly because of a choice of a certain name), but the twist worked really well!

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    • EagleAye says:

      Hehe. Perhaps I shouldn’t use “Lolita.” I realize it has a certain connotation. For me, it just reminds me of the beautiful and sweet classmate from high school years. I’m glad you enjoyed the twist. Thanks so much! 🙂

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  2. Yet again, a wonderful story. I once worked at the University of Kentucky Medical Center as a microbiologist and one of the hematologists told us the story about the blue-skinned family. Very interesting inclusion in your story.

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    • EagleAye says:

      Thank you! Yes, the blue family had a certain condition that wasn’t bad enough to really harm them, but enough to produce their distinctive blue skin. One person with a super-rare gene just happened to find another person with the same super-rare gene…and they had kids. I read about this in Scientific American many years ago. It’s cool that you’ve heard about this too. Most folks look at me cross-eyed when I talk about it. Thanks very much! 🙂


  3. babso2you says:

    There was a news story that we saw about a family of blue people. They were missing something which made their skin blue and were eventually provided with whatever it was (can’t remember). Well done Eric. I wonder how much they got from the fellow with the stigmata gal? Thanks again for another excellent addition to the MFtS challenge! Be well… ^..^

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    • EagleAye says:

      The condition meant their blood cells didn’t absorb/transfer enough oxygen. But this works to degrees. Someone may have a slight case of it and you couldn’t tell and they won’t have ill-effects. A bad case and they suffer mightily. A lot of this family was right in the middle. The only ill-effect they experienced was blue skin. Many lived full lives into their nineties. Pretty crazy, eh? After the Stigmata girl, the salesman’s bank account was pretty well cleaned out. Poor guy! I’m glad you liked this one. Thanks so much, Barb! 🙂

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  4. Just saw a story about blue people in Kentucky, found a cure, something very simple, but can’t remember what it was. Great take on the prompt. Pay to be let off, hope he doesn’t fall for it again, or his bank account will double zeros! Love this!

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    • EagleAye says:

      Someone else said they just saw something about this too. Good timing, eh? Their story is a very interesting one. Glad you liked this one. Poor guy got taken by her cousin the Stigmata too. Rough trip for him! Thanks so much! 🙂


  5. lisa says:

    This was so clever. I really liked this story. I didn’t do the prompt this week because I just couldn’t think of anything. Well done!

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  6. Using a condition to some effect in that town – great stuff.

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  7. ansumani says:

    Horrorific tirckery and history- all in one . Very nice story.

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  8. You never fail to disappoint, one horror after another, though there must be an interesting family reunion happening at some stage…….enjoyed your take as always….

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  9. Danny James says:

    Love your research and notes. Your stories stand alone but the insights into your mind are delightful.


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  10. Indira says:

    Amazing research work woven into a wonderful story. Is it true, never seen a blue person?

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  11. Interesting con! Frightening!

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  12. You have such a fun imagination! I loved this story. The scammers have a pretty good scam going!

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  13. I think I’d stop at an army suplus store and buy a tent, then drive about 100 miles even if part of it was at night. Really creative story, Eric, and good research. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  14. Shey says:

    Very cruel con indeed. I hope they get caught one day. Poor travelers.

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