The Weakness – Mondays Finish the Story

Photo by: Barbara W. Beacham

The Weakness

The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode. Nate stood outside the cemetery’s largest crypt, holding a bucket. He straightened the thin black tie that went with his black suit. The sounds emanating from within the crypt chilled him.

“Ohhh. Ah…oh!”

“How long has this been going on?” complained Nate.

Morgan, who dressed similarly, shifted uncomfortably. “Six months.”

Nate spat angrily. Hiram Furstenberg was The Institute’s greatest demon hunter. Legend was, he had one significant weakness. “I can’t believe a succubus tricked him and now he’s sleeping with it.”

“Succubi are Hell’s beautiful experts in seduction,” shrugged Morgan.

Nate cringed. “Do we really have to tell him his girlfriend’s a demon?”

“‘Fraid so,” shrugged Morgan. “This comes from the top.”

“You mean…?”

“Yeah. HIM.”

“Oooooh, so good!” groaned the succubus from the crypt.

Nate sighed. “Okay, but why do we need this bucket?”

Morgan shrugged. “Remember. Hiram has one weakness.”

“Yes! Yes! Right there!” she squealed.

“Yeah. It’s obviously beautiful women.”


“No? What then?”

“Right before he kills a demon, he hurls. Big time. Projectile type stuff.”

“Oh!” Nate shuddered. “So when he learns his…”


“For six months?”


Nate winced. “I think I need a bigger bucket.”
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About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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22 Responses to The Weakness – Mondays Finish the Story

  1. Oh no! He has to kill is girlfriend because she is a demon! LOL! Funny story with all those noises coming from the crypt! Hahaha!

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  2. Lyn says:

    Hmmm I think a kiddie wading pool might be more appropriate. LOL love the ending 🙂

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  3. Joy Pixley says:

    LOL, great ending. And it seems likely Hiram will get demoted from being the Institute’s “greatest” demon hunter now that everyone knows he can’t even recognize one naked — big career fail, that was!

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  4. LRose says:

    You don’t see the name “Hiram” anymore. It was my paternal grandfather’s middle name and the name my father gave a character in of his short stories that I’m trying to posthumously finish in his honor. I think this is the only other time I’ve seen the name “Hiram” (oh, and yes, I do like your story)

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    • EagleAye says:

      Oh that’s interesting. How curious this name suddenly starts showing up. It just popped into my head. Perhaps it’s proof that you’re doing the right thing by finishing the story?

      Glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks so much! 🙂

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  5. Very funny, six months, wow, he is gonna need a bigger bucket, but then again, maybe she’s that good and he’s turned to the evil side? 🙂 Really, well told! Love it when a flash makes me smile!

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    • EagleAye says:

      You make a good point. What if Hiram hasn’t slipped at all, and he’s knows exactly what she is? Hmmm. They might need something more dangerous than a bucket! So happy to know you smiled. Smiles are a major goal for my stories. Thanks kindly! 🙂


  6. babso2you says:

    Break out that bigger bucket! Another wonderful story Eric! Thanks for sticking with me and the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well my friend… ^..^

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  7. EagleAye says:

    Hehe. Maybe time for a quick run to Home Depot. Thanks so much, Barb. It’s my pleasure to stick around. I’m having a lot of fun! 🙂


  8. Great story! Hiram’s not a common name these days. It’s apparently the actual name of ‘Brains’ from Thunderbirds though…

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    • EagleAye says:

      Haha! I think I got the name from a whiskey distiller named Hiram Walker. It is pretty rare these days, like naming your son, Ezekial. It’s just not done anymore. Glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks much! 🙂

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  9. Hiram will never live this down!!! Wonderful use of the prompt but then you always give us something special. Well done!!!!

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  10. Danny James says:

    I think I have met Hiram.


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  11. afairymind says:

    They’re definitely going to need a bigger bucket! A great story. I love how you interspersed the noises from within the tomb throughout their conversation – very amusing. 🙂

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