A New Ending

Photo by: Louise with The Storyteller’s Abode

Raul was fishing off the Portuguese coast when he found her. Thalassa climbed into his boat as he hauled on the nets. The mermaid was lovely. Beneath her sea green hair were two huge, enticing, glistening…green eyes.

Thalassa told him of the wondrous castles below with lovely gardens. All the creatures lived in fairness and equality. She spoke for hours of the wonders of the deep.

“Your world seems beautiful,” said Raul.

“So is yours!” grinned Thalassa.

“How do you know about it?”

She held up a waterproof cell phone. “YouTube!”

Raul covered his eyes.

“I’ve fallen in love with you!” exclaimed Thalassa. “Don’t worry, I know how the story ends. I sacrifice my home, grow legs, and live with you!”

“Uh….,” hesitated Raul.

“Tell me more about your…my, new home! Isn’t it fabulous?”

Unemployment soared. Violent nationalism and racism spun out of control. The soon-to-be-elected populous president would likely deport Raul’s ailing Sudanese father, and otherwise wreck the country.

Raul sighed, “How about a new ending? Any chance I could grow a tail?”
Written for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2017/07/24/fffaw-challenge-week-of-july-25-2017/

About EagleAye

I like looking at the serious subjects in the news and seeking the lighter side of the issue. I love satire and spoofs. I see the ridiculous side of things all the time, and my goal is to share that light-hearted view.
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30 Responses to A New Ending

  1. Varad says:

    Loved this quirky spin on the fairy tale. Good work.

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  2. Great twist on the old tail, I mean tale! 🙂

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    That’s one way to escape the horror of the world at the moment!

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  4. Hahahaha! Given the choices, I think the better choice would be to become a merman! Great story!

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  5. Loved it! Great spin on the fairy tale.

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  6. Sounds great down there! I too wrote a tale with a tail! Great minds and all that…

    Click to read my FFfAW

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  7. List of X says:

    “I’m sorry”, she said. “Many have tried, and all have failed. It’s breathing underwater that’s the hardest part.”
    And then it hit Raul – how it can all work out, and even finally get his father the help he needs. “I wonder just how many million euros I could get from some Saudi prince or an oil tycoon for a real live talking mermaid?”, he thought to himself.

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  8. Joy Pixley says:

    I think Raul has the right idea. That, and don’t tell anyone about the wondrous land under the sea. The last thing they need is “help” from us!

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  9. athling2001 says:

    Love the reality of the ‘events’ and the twist. Great job.

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  10. luckyjc007 says:

    Raul is wise to spare her of the miseries his world experiences, but he really doesn’t know about hers and may find out hers is just a fairytale and not real at all! Life can be tough no matter where you are…perhaps just different problems. Grate tale! 🙂

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  11. A sweet twist. I would run off to her world for a change 🙂

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  12. I love that you put a spin on it with what’s going on around us now in reality. As like in my blog everyone sees things different and that’s the beauty of writing and free speech.

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    • EagleAye says:

      I spend a lot of time reading/watching news. So current issues often drift into my stories. It’s fun to be aware of concerns but be able to laugh about it as well. Thanks so much for your thoughts. I appreciate it.


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